@motie2, I'm just trying to capture a split second's thoughts when I'm having a pipe. It's hard to remember the words and then come back and write them down afterwards. also, there is some word substitution based on the meter that I have to go through. That initial bunch you published at the top of this thread I thought was fantastic. Jot down a few more when the spirit moves you.
I also found these assertions regarding the syllabification of prayer:
1) "It depends on the meaning of the word. If you mean "one who prays", then it would be two. If you mean "what is prayed", then it is one."
2) "The rules are bent in poetry. It depends how the line scans and what it has to rhyme with. If the beat and rhyme require prayer to be 2 syllables, then it's said with 2 syllables. If the beat and rhyme require one syllable, then it's said with one."
@badgerpiper -- Kudos! An excellent little gem. I like it.
Hey, the rest of y'all: Write a haiku poem, doesn't need to rhyme (but neatly done, Brother Badger), but has three lines of five, seven, and five syllables, in that order. We are allowing punctuation but it isn't necessary. We're trying to write haiku about pipe smoking, and the current challenge is <<Rewrite this Irish proverb into Haiku: "Smoke your pipe and be silent; there’s only wind and smoke in the world.">>
Thank you for the kind words @motie2 and @mfresa on my haiku. The rhyme in my wasn't intentional, but when it came together, I was happy with the results.
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Oh Yeah, very good.
Latakia surrounds me
I'm one with the world
Listen to the woodpeckers
Paradise anow!
Smoke your pipe and be silent -
Add spice to the world.
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I took <<Smoke your pipe and be silent; there’s only wind and smoke in the world.>> and broke it down into smoke, pipe, silent, wind, world
First attempt, this came out:
Sipped, pipe smoke ascends,
rising, a prayer on the wind.
Silent world; at peace.
Peace and silence flow
Alone with the briar's glow
Smoke and wind entwined